The world that we live in today is dominated by advertising, and this true as we can see many of the Adverts on television, on the World Wide Web, in the street and even on our mobile phones.However, many of the strategies used to sell a product or service can be considered immoral or unacceptable.
The criteria examiners use for marking Task 2 essays constantly refers to 'position'.
For example, for Band 7, it says "presents a clear position throughout the response".
But there are two basic things that someone will expect to see when you do an introduction.
That is1) Introduce the topic2) Let the reader know what you will be writing about in the essay So you should do those basic things - the examiner will like it more of course if it is well-written - but that is a grammar issue.
Follow these links for further guidance writing introductions and writing thesis statements. The only problem is your wording looks odd in the first sentences.
You have said that the world is dominated by advertising (this looks like your opinion), but then you have said your own opinion is true.You would not have said the first part if you did not think it was true, so this looks odd.I would word it like this: Hi, It is not really writing a good introduction to attract the examiner - the examiner will read your introduction whatever you do because that is their job!Thanks by Yasar In opinion essays, should I give my opinion in introductory paragraph or should i wait till conclusion in order to present my opinion.Most of the format I have seen online state their opinion in the introduction and then reaffirm it in the conclusion but that seems more like a repetition to me. Hi, It's very important to make sure you clearly give your opinion in an opinion essay.by Udhaya S (Chennai) Please help me to correct introduction of Ielts essay Some people think that schools should select students according to their academic abilities, while others believe that it is better to have students with different abilities studying together. Answer: Every children will have different abilities.Some people argue that it is undesirable to distinct children according to their abilities.(Check out the link in the post above that explains introduction writing).This can be a good thing as it will avoid any confusion, especially if you are a lower level candidate and you are less able to make your ideas clear in the body paragraphs.Though some people argue that it is undesirable to separate children according to their skills, personally I believe that it is healthier to differentiate children in this respect.Hi Rajeev, It's not really possible to say whether it would have or not.